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Here’s this week’s grab bag of grammar, style and other missteps, compiled with help from colleagues and readers.
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What makes the Morgan Library & Museum’s coming exhibition noteworthy is that it will include three preparatory drawings of the painting, making it one of Rembrandt’s only works for which such sketches survive.
This construction is common but illogical. Make it “one of Rembrandt’s few works …”
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In 2015, a pipeline owned by Plains All American Pipeline sprung a leak that released 3,400 barrels of crude into the ocean, fouling several newly created marine protected areas.
Use “sprang” for the simple past tense.
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There is, moreover, an authority to Viertel’s analysis; he knows from whence he speaks, given a background in dramaturgy (at the Mark Taper Forum in Los Angeles), criticism (at The Los Angeles Herald Examiner) and producing (as the senior vice president of Jujamcyn Theaters).
Well, “whence” means “from where,” so “from whence” is redundant. But the real problem is that we actually meant “whereof,” meaning “of what.”
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At Kansas, where he was known as “the Great White Whale,” he had been an all-American, averaging almost 25 points a game at a time when basketball was a slower, more low-scoring pursuit.
Make it “a slower, lower-scoring pursuit.”
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The court papers said Ms. Sorrell had learned the dean had also harassed other women employees at the university.
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